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 | How I Got My Gift for Public Speaking  [E] Prompt 1: The gift for public speaking inherited from my Mother  |
| (3.5)| Hello G. B. Williams , my name is Just an Ordinary Boo! and I am part of a reviewing activity for SAJ.This review is made as a gesture of friendship and community, please accept it as such.  What Drew Me In: Well it's part of a shower, so being gifted one, you have - as the song says - 'somewhere somehow done something good'! There's a lot of poetry in your port and although I dabble in writing it, I don't feel qualified to offer meaningful feedback. Short story, short story, my eyes were going down the list when they were caught by this title and intro. Public speaking is a skill that eludes many a good writer, I wondered if you had some insight that might help me hone a skill I lack. Then, the intro hit me, the word 'public' is written there as 'publice' - if I do nothing more than let you change that, it'll prevent the written equivalent of you venturing out with a soup-stain on your formal shirt! The General Impression: This is a tribute, to a mother who encouraged her child to speak up and speak out. The Things That Worked For Me: Anything that reminisces and appreciates those who have been instrumental in our progress to current situation is A-OK with me. Overcoming hurdles to reach pinnacles thought unattainable is also an attention grabber. The Things That Made Me Stop and Think: I wanted to see some concrete suggestions or tips that one could emulate. I saw nothing beyond repeated recitation and constant practice. But the others who took part in the contests and settled for the second, third or just participation prizes also did the same. What lifted you to the coveted blues? I'd also have liked some anecdote, some description of child and woman, something to change this from mere narration to compelling tale. Suggestions: Remember these are made, not from any lofty pinnacle of ability or erudition, but more as a hiccup seen in the smooth enjoyment of a concerned reader -:"it is natural to be frightened for the first few minutes, but if you know your subject matter, you will get over the freight and settle right in" Spell check cannot catch those words that are not 'wrongly spelled' in that the word exists in that form, it's just not the word one intended to use. I think you mean 'fright' here, not 'freight'. You must have an eagle eye or be a disinterested observer to sift through the write and find these. We all have cause to be grateful to the legion of keen eyed reviewers that catch what slipped past at even tenth edit! "Teachers worked with us on our strengths. We were not allowed to focus on our weaknesses." I pondered that statement, perhaps what you man was that no one was punished or blamed for weaknesses, or that brooding over failures was not encouraged? For it seems illogical to not strengthen and prop up weak points as well as hone and polish the strengths. I do not normally get into a debate on content, but because the overall idea is encouragement, I thought that should be spelled out with clarity. Any comments are only an individual opinion. Please sip it all, allow what you find sweet to take the edge off what you think is sour.  May your words go on to shine!  Effort brings colour to Life
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