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 Oak Tree  [E]
This sounds like a prologue to me. It's still pretty short...
by Dracomurex
Review of Oak Tree  
Review by Soh ~ Luminousa
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Dracomurex

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I came across your story on the newbie list of works.

My first impressions:

This piece is very visual. As I read on, I could visualise each and every detail of what you have described.

My thoughts:

I liked your way of describing the situation. For the protagonist, there is something intriguing about the oak tree, especially through the following line: There’s a large red oak tree on the further end of the field, standing alone just out of range of the forest behind it.
There is an air of mystery about as we read. Just as we are about to find out what is in the oak tree which is so interesting, we are pulled away, because darkness is falling. Something or someone's presence is scaring the protagonist, which leads to his/her sudden, blind flight from that place. However, after a running a distance, the threat is no more and the protagonist retires for the night. The readers are left in suspense as to what was he/she escaping from.

You have maintained the tense well and it contributes to the mood of the story. The grammar and punctuation are fine too.

My favourite lines:

grasshoppers jumping in and out of the orange light as the sun goes down,

There’s a large red oak tree on the further end of the field, standing alone just out of range of the forest behind it.

The grass hinders me now, tangling over my bare feet and pulling at my clothes.

Final thoughts:

I liked this little story very much. Its a perfect blend of mystery and horror. I would love to read the next part of this story. Thanks for sharing this with us *Smile*

Soh

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