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 Life  [E]
Life is what you make it, but life doesn't always turn out the way you want it to.
by Care
Review of Life  
Review by Shubham
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Care!

This poem ANYONE would be able to relate to! ;)
You've written it well, but it doesn't flow smoothly. Many of your lines are too long which breaks the flow.
I like the content of the poem but maybe you can just make these few corrections and it'll work out great for you!

Keep writing, and I'll keep writing,
Shubham
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