Hi Nathaniel! I just read your story and I have a few suggestions on it

First, I have to tell you that I love mysteries. I was drawn to this by your Heading. Great job there. Any suggestions I make leaves it up to you whether to use them or. I only suggest to help.

I really liked the mystery surrounding the lights. The problem I had was there really wasn't an ending. I believe you could really build on this story. First you need to clean up your sentences and shorten them as they are too long. Then check your spelling and grammar.

When writing a story it is best you read it out loud to yourself or have a friend read it to you. Th9is is the way to catch you mistakes and make the corrections.

I really was let-down at the ending because I think you can put much more into this. We need clues, we need more mystery, we need to know about the wife left in the home in the woods at night, etc.

See what I mean? Anyway, over all I really like your story, I just want you to tweak it, clean it up and give us a good ending. Thanks for sharing you r story. Lynda~Wishbone Laughing Tree ~~Image #4000 Sharing Restricted~~