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Hey, Paul D . This review is a part of your solar package from the Power shop. I stumbled upon this while going through entries for Cramp. Please note that this review represents my views as a reader and is not meant to offend in any manner.

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First Imprression

How very unexpected! This story was a bundle of surprise from the beginning. Initially I didn't understand what you're talking about, but by the time you reached end, I wanted to pat you for showing the surprises. The only thing which confused me was how will setting an avalanche help them? I assumed that since they can't move to another side of the valley, they'll move the avalanche there, but I'm not so sure of how this is done or if this is done. I wished you had explained this a bit more but I can see that you already were at the end of the word count.

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Suggestions

It's a very well-done story. I didn't find any mistakes or errors.

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Final Thoughts

As I said, I wished this story to be a bit longer, to explain the avalanche creation more, but otherwise I enjoyed it a lot. I can see how this story can be a winner.

Thanks a lot for sharing it.

Keep Writing! *Thumbsup*

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