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Review by ~WhoMe???~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*SeahorseV* An interesting tale on love between partners and how they bridge the gap. This is a modern day science fiction romance with a twist.


*SeahorseP* One of the first things that stood out was the title. I didn't quite like it for the story. It was too telling and left now mystery or intrigue. If I had to pick one, I kind of like, "The Ultimate Sacrifice". This leaves the reader wanting to know what happened and doesn't tell them before they even read the story. Just my opinion though, feel free to use it as your own if you like it.

*SeahorseB*I feel the story is rushed. The two go from being partners and friends to automatically thinking about marriage, all without dating. Something more needs to be told about them working in such close proximity and circumstance that it was already as if they had dated for years, they knew each other so well. Otherwise, without this added information the reader doesn't see the connection, it feels forced and as if a big part of the story is glossed over.

*SeahorseG* I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon. Aside from the above mentioned, all appeared to be in order.



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