Review of My Time with the Team First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. OVERALL IMPRESSIONS: Obviously this is not the first portion of the story. It took me a little while to understand what exactly was happening. This team seems to be engaged in sexual action amongst the members. PLOT & CHARACTERS: The previous sexual activity seems to have put Chris in problems There is an energetic group sex with unusual sexual positions. Sometimes too much detail can be distracting. SUGGESTIONS/EDITS: Use a larger font to make your story more readable. FINAL THOUGHTS: Make your actions more clear and state in the opening if the story is a continuation of a larger story. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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