Hello Brooke,

I found your poem"The Last Goodbye"  on the "review a newbie" link and thought it was an enjoyable read.

I don't pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. You don't have to agree with anything I am saying, I'm simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:
I generally don't review much poetry, but when I came across your title, it caught my eye. With that said, I am very glad I took the time to read it. It was an emotional read about a man who made everything seem right in this young girls life. He was the guy who took her troubled life and made it vibrant. Unfortunately, he now has to leave and I don't think she knows how she will be able to bear his absence until he returns. Now that he is gone, the feelings of his tender touch and kiss are long gone. All she has now are feelings of a heart burning with a desire to have him back. I really enjoyed the words you used to describe the emotional turn of events in. Goodbyes are never fun or easy, and I felt you brought the emotional level to the surface in this piece. Very Nice!!

Grammar and Mechanics:
I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .