Hello ms.diannemarie,

I found your article "Learn what you love"  on the "review a newbie" link and thought it was an enjoyable read.

I don't pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. You don't have to agree with anything I am saying, I'm simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:
I thought your article was well written and very informative. Your intent was to promote speedycourse.com and encourage others to visit the site and try it out. This was a good piece of adcopy writing in my opinion. You created an interest immediately in your first two paragraphs, and then plugged speedycourse.com six times throughout the article. This is your keyword for the story, I think you need one more plug in the opening paragraph. Generally keywords are found in the beginning, middle, and end of an article. Other than that, I thought the article was compelling, and I will be checking out speedycourse.com tonight.

Grammar and Mechanics:
I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .