Review number # 1 of week September 18-24, 2014

Hi Stephen,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Byron's Good Deed

First Impression: I thought the explanations at the beginning made the story more enjoyable because I did not have to ponder about the unfamiliar words.

What I liked: How easily Emily engaged with Byron, she showed no fear and actually reached out to rub his injured head. The conversation that progressed so comfortably between them. The crazy car ride sounded scary but Emily trusted Byron, that was a interesting leap of faith.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it totally works as is.

Favorite Parts: Emily's mother waking her up for the apple pie she was hoping to have and then the surprise announcement about the unexpected visitor from Tasmania. That was a really amusing conclusion to a delightful story.

Overall Impression: Bryon's good deed was engaging and flowed very well from the beginning to end.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .