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Hello, Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Cupcakey*
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*Seahorsep* You have a fine grasp on Agape love. It is pure, unconditional and self-less. Your article shows the meaning of this love, however, it could be fille-in better to add some examples of it. See below.

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"It's an action and a choice. Love is patient, love is kind, love is gentle, love is not self-seeking, love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth, it always protects, always trusts, etc."

*Bulletr* It sounds very much like a list, here. You should break it apart and give examples of each layer of this love as it unfolds, so the reader could picture it netter.

In what way would trust be shown in this type of higher love?

EXAMPLE: When a person loves this completely, he will trust you when all others doubt your veracity. This is one way to break down the first paragraph, by writing something about "trust." Then you would write something about unselfishness, the sacrifices made, the appreciation of somebody else without need for praise.

*Bulletg* It isn't wise, nor is it professional-looking, to end the sentence with, "etc."

*Thinker* I think you have a good understanding of Agape love, but you need to develop the analysis further in your essay, in order to illustrate it to your readers. It is a little incomplete as it stands.

Thus, I consider this more of a rough draft with so much potential to make it a fine essay when completed.

You have a great start. *Smile* With just a little more editing and you will have the perfect recipe for making this a fine and informative article. *Beakerp*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch





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