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 Silent Lucidity  [ASR]
A patient discovers he is still awake but paralized during his operation.
by S. Wynterbourne
Review of Silent Lucidity  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI S.Wynterborne! Happy One year Anniversary! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

Wow! This is a creepy episode. The line at the end really hit its mark. *Shock*

Your description of this man undergoing surgery is vivid and you draw us into his growing awareness naturally. The idea that he is aware is freaky.
I was puzzled when you said he couldn't recall after the incident--does that mean he pulls through? The ending evoked other possibilities.

The last paragraph gives a real sensate picture of this being with its creepy voice and scarey appearance. Yikes! I hope it is just a nightmare and he will wake up. Not a pleasant experience while in surgery. The title works !

You did a good job with the present tense though I noticed in the third verse it changed-- he couldn't begin, pain was exploding etc.

I couldn't help but read on to see what would happen and then you leave us hanging. *Shock* Good ploy!

Thanks for sharing your crafting and allowing me to enter the dream.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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