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Given: Sep 29, 2014 at 6:32pm
Length: 933 Characters |
836 w/o WritingML
Welcome to WDC Lindsay! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!
I was charmed by the title and liked the alliterative quality or Hortense and Honeybee. Nice flow and kids will like it too.
The theme for the children's series is original and I can imagine the lessons that could be facilitated through the adventures.
I enjoyed reading this introduction as it is so child centered in tone and vocabulary. We can see the beginnings of a caring and brave little bee and learned a little about hive life.
I think you need a comma after "at first" and "out side" is one word.
I can see the first 5 lines in a paragraph--or in with a picture page.
This is a good basic summary of the start. I can't wait to hear of her adventures. Keep writing.
Light on the path as you write on!
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