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 Welcome to WDC! Adam Drake . I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!   Absolutely marvelous! I loved it and could feel the passion and potent exhortaion at theend, the joy of discovering inner power!I read it aloud and it called forth a dramatic vibe of speech. Great emotional appeal and you draw me to believe in the dream you share.The symbol of a dragon really is effective for this psychological process describes so imaginatively. You stayed true to the theme in language and description--dungeon, fortress. dragon etc. Coherency and the pargraphing was good and it was easy to follow your weave. Only A few minor glitches struck me: . In "someone that could walk freely" I thik you need to have "who would walk.." as it is a person you refer to. I think the word "to" in so to was i free" near the end, needs to be "too" .  The fourth paragraph was my favourite for it really raised the vibe and inspired me to go up with the dragon!  Brilliant. We all want to know we can do this. You convince us it is worth the training. Thanks for sharing your craft. It is uplifting and well conceived expression which entertained, inpsired as you shared your process in an imaginative way. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
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