HI weird one!
I could not resist your title and burst out laughing at your verse! Excellent evocation in the last line! I can just imagine the whole moment in time.
The student blushing and embarrassed either because his poem is not very good or he wrote a love poem and kids will smirk. Your title lets us know for sure but if we didn't see the title, it opens up avenues for the reader to rleate and see between the lines their own way. Japanese poetry allows for that experience. So good for you.

Thanks for writing your first senryu. It made an impact in expressing human nature in a humourous way! .

Good work with the syllable and line count.
I am not sure senryu traditionally uses punctuation/caps much but your useage makes sure we get the tone and vibe.
As I said earlier titles give away the punch line. But it helps us keep track of what we write. LOL so I won't discount in my rating.

This just rocks and I salute you!!

eyestar


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