Review number # 1 of week Oct.2-8th, 2014

Hi Chanchal,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: On The Swing

First Impression: The poem reminds me of my childhood swinging.

What I liked: The second stanza I felt a strong connection with because of my childhood trying to reach the sky.

What needs your attention: The last line you need to capitalize I, you have it in lowercase.

Favorite Parts: I am alone, humming. I have heard many children singing happily on the swings. This is always a special connection because I used to do the same thing.

Overall Impression: I think you covered a childhood experience very well in this poem. A child has dilemmas in their lives but once on a swing, it is like they are lifted to another world.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




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