Review number # 3 of week Oct.2-8th, 2014

Hi Perhaps

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Shaman's Trance

First Impression: I love the visual imagery as I glanced before I began reading. It made me think of a dream floating.

What I liked: When you see your blindness, you will awaken. I think all of us struggle to really look at a situation and accept our vulnerability.

What needs your attention: I would move it up on the page a bit.

Favorite Parts: The gentle reminder to the reader that if we lose our footing that we simply need to retrace our steps. Life is not predictable and yes, we do stumble. We just need to try again. Excellent conclusion.

Overall Impression: Excellent! I felt the poem flowed beautifully from beginning to end. I enjoyed the visual imagery as I read on the printed page as well as the mental images you created with your words.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




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