I love the 'whispered tune', nicely done.

Your first verse rhymed so I was disappointed that the rest didn't. You rhymed in a way I hadn't seen before, the third and sixth lines.

Your verses do not have the continuity of having the same amount of lines in each. I was looking forward to seeing how you did with the every third line rhyming.

I love your third verse the best I think. Guilty feelings at not writing giving meaning to the pencil and sand, gave a great personal touch.

Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn