Hi Immortal,
This is a wonderful poem. The tone is formal and is perfect for such an emotional poem. The reader is taken by the beauty and elegance of this poem. You have handled this poetic form extremely well. The free verse works well in this poem. The poem has a wonderful rhyme that gives the poem a fantastic rhythm. The poem flows extremely well and is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar very consistently in this poem. There is nothing to take away from the reader's enjoyment of the poem. Great job.