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Hi Neon Rush,
This is a an ordinary happening that you have turned into a very engaging story. The tone is relaxed and gets all the reader's attention right away. The reader is brought back to all the times the perused their own photo albums. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is a day in the like type of story as opposed to a conflict based story. This is very rare and very interesting. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.