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Hi dblameck (David) ,

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I enjoyed the story about Aunt Lily and her niece's boyfriend, Justin falling for each other. The heat build slowly from the time he saw her, the sun shining behind her dress, their conversation, dinner and finally when they went home and things becoming sizzling hot. I like the way the plot builds up.

You used scent very well. My suggestion here is that, if the first time the candles had the scent of berry and vanilla, the second time when they returned home, it should have been a spicier/ stronger scent to indicate/ symbolize that things were getting hotter between them. Maybe this will help you: https://au.lifestyle.yahoo.com/womens-health/health/a/5934883/fragrant-attractio...
I find it helpful for my stories. The ending was good: totally unexpected.

Now for the prompt. As much as I liked the way you used candles and the way they flickered and produced scents and gave a romantic setting to this story, I didn't think you used the prompt prominently. I wish the candles literally went out, encouraging Justin and Aunt Lily to have sex. However, the story did revolve around the prompt.

Aunt Lily took off her gown The nightgown slid from her shoulders and she was revealed in all her naked splendor.Then, she's in her gown again - pressing against the material of her gown

Ii moaned as she expertly

There were some minor grammatical mistakes that you can correct when you read through.I also think it will be good if you write dialogues on a separate line because it can sometimes be confusing as to who said what.

Other than that, well done! Write on!

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