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 In the darkness  [XGC]
A priestess gives herself as sacrifice
by MidnightStalker
Review of In the darkness  
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Rated: XGC | (4.0)
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Hi MidnightStalker ,

I'm reviewing for "Invalid Item" . Thanks for entering.

I enjoyed this story about a young priestess offering herself for sacrifice, and it turned out that she happened to be special: born at noon so happened to have so much of light within her. Instead of being sacrificed, she left the dark place alive with the hope of having an offspring of The Father of Darkness. I like that twist very much and how it slowly revealed itself.

You followed the prompt very well *Thumbsup*.

The only drawback was that the creature looked so animal. There was a certain part when the main character could actually feel his body's thick hair on her skin. One of the contest's rules is no bestiality, and this part really made the creature so animal like.

Another part I was unsure of is this line: red skin that glowed black in the green light. I wasn't able to imagine that. And if his skin was actually red but looked black, how did she know it was red?

The setting was good: creepy, mysterious, new to the priestess. I liked the end where she decided to return for her body's hunger. I found it raw,real, and erotic. It also confirms my belief towards priests and nuns: I believe that they do have sexual desires. It would be nice to see how a priestess copes with those desires.

I enjoyed this story and the suspense very much. The last time I reviewed a story of yours for this contest, I remember saying that the horror part wasn't so clear. This time round, it is.

Write on!

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