Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC.
This is a Simply Positive Review.

I could feel the deep emotional struggle of a mother trying to reach out to her son after so many years of terrible choices that separated the two, emotionally and as a bond between mother and son, physically.

The terrible part of it is that a father neglects his son's needs, and drops everything on the mother's lap as far as the upbringing. Shameful of him!

Observations:

I think since this is under a poetry genre, You might have a smoother flow if you break up the lines and place them in a verse-type order with punctuation or line break pauses. You also have places where the period ends a sentence, yet you start the next one without a capital letter.

"i" In multiple places you have lower case "i" when it should be "I."

The words "chasing" is used five times in the second paragraph. Perhaps a word replacement could be used and an elimination whee it isn't needed to be repeated would help out, here.

"So confused on the lifestyle i want to chose ... " [about the lifestyle, "I" want ...]

I think this poem has wonderful potential with a little bit of editing and possibly reformatting the form for easier reading.

The subject matter is one that will hit hard and reach many readers, for it is an issue that is certainly broad based in this day and age.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .