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 My Greatest Fear  [E]
Title pretty much sums it up
by misfit_joker
Review of My Greatest Fear  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, misfit_joker . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Peace2*

*Jackolantern* Title, Hook, and Formatting: You're right, the title does just about sum it up. We know going into the poem what the subject matter will be. We all have fears, so I was interested in seeing what yours included. The first stanza was an excellent hook for me, especially because I detest spiders. They just have too many legs. No one needs that many legs.

*Jackolantern* Best Bits: I dug the build up to the actual greatest fear. You talked about some things you're afraid of, but left the biggest fear a mystery until the end. Your fears are all very common things, so I think a lot of people will be able to relate to them.

I specifically liked the repetition of having no shame in the first three stanzas. I don't think most phobias should be shameful, but it just further displayed how big the greatest phobia really is.

*Jackolantern* Possible Suggestions: The language used throughout the poem is a bit stiff, especially for a poem. This might just be a difference in taste really. I feel like the stiffness of "I am afraid of..." and "I have no..." makes it lack emotional draw from me as a reader. I also noticed that it's hard to get a feel of the rhythm, which is possibly for the same reason.

*Jackolantern* Summary: Good idea for a poem and I think a lot of people will relate to your greatest fear of all, as well as your other fears. I wish the language was a little less rigid so we could get a true feel for the emotion and rhythm of the poem. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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