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Hello, cjshoneybee. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Peace2*

*Jackolantern* Title, Hook, and Formatting: The title accurately describes the topic of the poem. I like the description. Math can be a real pain, no doubt.

*Jackolantern* Best Bits: I like that you used specific math phrases to describe the horror you experience in math class. Math has never quite clicked for me before either. You've got a good method going. Just race through it as fast as you can so it will be over. *Laugh* The lines, Equations freak me out, concepts I'll never understand looming over my day were my favorite in the poem. They accurately portray the anxiety that goes along with having to deal with a subject you don't understand.

*Jackolantern* Possible Suggestions: The biggest issue I have is with the rhythm, or lack thereof. I can't quite get the flow down because some lines are so much shorter than others, they don't seem to quite fit together. I might suggest adding more line breaks. Read the poem out loud to yourself and see which lines don't flow well with the ones before or after them. The second-to-last line is a great example. I might also suggest adding more poetic language that will draw a more emotional reaction from your readers.

*Jackolantern* Summary: I liked the concept of this poem. We all have a subject like that and we can't figure it out for one reason or another. It's not a matter of stupidity, but rather just having to work much harder in that subject. I wish the poem evoked more of an emotional response and had a little bit more flow. Thanks again for sharing!

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