Review number # 2 of week Oct.9-15th, 2014

Hi Joy

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Heart Consumed

First Impression: The author deeply loves someone.

What I liked: The line you are my sunshine after the rain. It evokes a beautiful image to the readers mind.

What needs your attention: I believe a poem centered on the page speaks of the authors confidence in their work. That may be just me but the love is expressed so beautiful it is a shame to see it cling to the side.

Favorite Parts: Like every relationship there are joyful and difficult moments and the author did not try to hide them but acknowledged the good and the bad. I felt that made the realtionshop more meaningful.

Overall Impression: I feel you can add more to this poem to make it stronger. I hope you it is a great way to share a wonderful relationship.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .