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| Hello, I am reviewing this as a judge in the "Invalid Item" ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** HAPPY HALLOWEEN FROM "Simply Positive Review Forum " !!!The Jack-O-Lantern:  (Title, description, etc...) : Title fits story very well, description works in contest, but could use more detail afterwards to draw in readers.The Costume: (Contents): I enjoyed the play of emotions the story created as I read, both in the contents and myself. Tenyane is so easy to relate to and the added magickal bits really made this piece sparkle for me. They come across very naturally and realistic. Plot is well planned with much scope for expansion. The Treats:  (Imagery, Emotion)I loved the imagery in this story, from the ants first appearance to Joe's bullying and Tenyane taking a stand. It is all captivating and adds great depth and richness to your story. Emotions are strong and interestingly portrayed. Characters are realistic, believable and very easy to identify with. The Tricks:  (Suggestions): None. I enjoyed it just as it is and could find no grammer or spelling errors. Formatting is excellent. The Full Moon:  (Overall Thoughts)Your rewritten version really expands your plot, while adding detail and a wealth of emotion to the story. An excellent job of editing and expansion in this story! A SIMPLY POSITIVE REVIEW BY SM FERGUSON!!
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You responded to this review 10/21/2014 @ 3:04pm EDT