Review number # 1 of week October 16-22nd, 2014

Hi Rhyssa

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Why The Golf Cart Died

First Impression: The poor monster, he only wanted to play.

What I liked: The monster wants to have a friend. I loved how you gave him human characteristics, so we could all relate to his feelings.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is perfect in everyway

Favorite Parts: My favorite stanza is the monster smells formaldehyde, that particular one really jumps out to me his desperation to find a friend and the dawning difference that he is different than they are.

Overall Impression: The goal is to receive one star for your work. I am honored to present you your one star for an awesome entry in the Spam Slingers Contest.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .