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Hi Paul D ,

I'm reviewing as a judge for "Supernatural Writing Contest - Closed" .

I saw that the supernatural element of this sonnet is an angel whose wings are needed by a fallen angel.

I like the rhyme structure of the poem since it makes the poem flow very well. I also like that the dark side of this poem was through loneliness of the angel.

Read the second line of the second stanza. I suggest changing hears to hear.

I wondered why the brief introduction said that the poem is about a fallen angel. To me, the poem is about a lonely angel. I understood that the fallen angel was another character.

Those are my subjective suggestions, so feel free to discard them if you don't think they fit your poem. Thanks for entering.

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