Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC.
This is a Simply Positive Review.

The reader certainly gets the creep factor in this read. It starts off innocently enough, beautiful childhood memories with the family and then takes a strange and eerie turn in another direction.

The item was a bit short, making me wonder if it was for a specific word count contest. If that is not the case, so much more can be done with this story to add more chilling impact. The title threw me off a little -- I was expecting something very subdued about the approaching winter season. I like your mind. You leave the reader wanting for more.

I think a little more time taken with the character to picture him better might be helpful. We want to feel his anticipation, so that part should be savored a little before the approaching headlights coming toward his direction.

Since this is such a short piece and the number isn't too large, one hundred should be written out. It is less distracting in this type of item.

I suggest placing the author's note after the story itself. It was confusing at first because I thought it was where the story began.

It's a fine first attempt and could be even better with a little bit of development of character and scene, keeping the readers on their toes from start to finish.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .