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Hi taliah_l,

I'm reviewing as a judge of "Supernatural Writing Contest - Closed" .

I like your story. It's like a dream within a dream. This is because, from the office, he went to a stylish room and found a lady. Within that seductive lady was music from a music box. He then returns to reality and the readers realize that the man was probably dreaming. My suggestion is to make the story a bit more surreal because dreams are mostly ignored because they're just dreams according to most people.

I like the flow and the way the man's dream was bizzare.

Keep writing!

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