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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hi Shukare ,

I'm reviewing as the judge of "Supernatural Writing Contest - Closed" .

I like that your story began from the olden times. I saw that whatever happened in the past continued up to the present and really liked the connection such as the one I saw between Ava and Marlin. I think that there's a religious theme in the story as well.

My suggestion is to work on the flow and the concept of the story. i didn't understand it fully. Form the olden times, what exactly happened? Maybe if I had understood that part, the rest of the parts would be clearer. To me, the second part was a bit clearer than the first and the third part of the story.

Keep writing! Practice makes perfect.

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