I enjoyed reading your story about a spirit of a husband coming to court to testify the innocence of his son, Andrew. My favorite part is when his spirit returned and shocked everyone.
I liked the characters and their behavior.
My suggestion is to make it clear whose point of view you want to write from. If it's from Andrew's POV, I did read that he whispered at the end, but you could show his thoughts at the beginning of the story just to show your readers that you're writing from his POV.
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