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 The Evident Autumn  [E]
Description of Fall
by Tom Collett
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, Tom Collett . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Peace2*

*Beakerr* General Impressions: Your title works well for the poem subject, which is the evidence of fall. There is some nice imagery in your descriptions and it makes me wish it wasn't already snowing where I live. *Laugh*

*Beakerb* Best Parts: The second stanza flowed very well and had a lot of vivid imagery. My favorite line was, Through dark forests and dead grassed hills. I think that's a great description of what the end of fall looks like and we know at that point that winter is coming soon.

*Beakero* Possible Suggestions: There wasn't a great flow or rhythm overall. In the first stanza, the rhyming pattern didn't come until the third and fifth line, which rhymed with each other. In the second stanza, every other line rhymed. In the third stanza, it was close to the second stanza, but 'painting' and 'reigning' didn't quite hit the pattern and threw it off slightly.

*Beakerv* Summary: Overall, I think you have some accurate descriptions of fall. You were able to capture that time of year well. You may want to rework some of the rhymes to give the poem a smoother flow. Thanks for sharing with us!

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