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TITLE, DESCRIPTION;: Great title! Description fits, but maybe punch it up- But He won't go away just yet.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Wow, I was caught up and pulled into this littlestory from the opening sentence! Should have seen that ending coming... Well done!

PLOT; FLOW;: Plot is hard hitting, solidly woven and well delivered. Flow is smooth and breath-taking in it's delivery.

Characters, Dialogue:: I liked your main character Kelly, she is a greatfriend with strong beliefs and Irelated well to her because I certainly would have had just her reaction at the end!
Dialogue is crisp and grabs reader by the hairs standing up on thier necks.

IMAGERY; EMOTION:: Imagery is excellent and puts readers right inside each scene. Nice work in so few words!

Favorite Lines/Parts::
description of Kelly's adventure with friends- don't want to give story away here. Ending- it gave me goosebumps!

SUGGESTIONS;
So Kelly...[ you use the word 'so' often]
near the end of the seance, Kelly noticed...
It was late, so...
with me," he said...

CLOSING THOUGHTS;: An amazing little story that will stick in my mind for quite awhile! Highly recommended to other lovers of darker tles!


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