I liked the title and description to this story. It was quite easy to get caught up in the plot, but a little more description would really make this pop! How about adding some touches of scent into the story, what does the shop smell like? Is it open/airy or cramped? Does Holly have a scent about him? pine, fresh air, etc. I liked the idea of the spirit jars, but did feel sorry for those trapped within. I enjoyed how Susie set Holly free, but a bit dissappointed he chose to be a blackjack dealer, felt out of sync with his character, but could be just me.
Overall, an interesting, enjoyable little tale.