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Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Tophat*
This is a Simply Positive Review.

*Hotair3* Your poem reached inside and took hold of my heart. I felt such a sadness and yet I could also feel the romance, the history of young love and a lifetime of memory building. It was truly beautiful.

Your poem had a melodious flow for the most part. There were a couple lines that seemed too long, with additional syllables throwing the easy rhythm a small jolt of electricity. Was that what you were going for? Perhaps it was meant to catch the reader and hold her there for a while so she may ponder the deep feeling of loss. *Seahorsep*

I do think the last line would read much better by simply dropping the word "again." *Plug*

*Video* Otherwise, your poem told a story of a sweet love now separated by the death of a mate. The road will never be the same in his life path, for a huge part of what made each day worth living was gone.

Beautifully done! *Gavel*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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