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 Meeting You  [E]
About love and leaving.
by Arabelle B. Wolfe
Review of Meeting You  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, Arabelle B. Wolfe . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Peace2*

*Beakerr* General Impressions: This is a quick poem about falling in and out of love. The title is nice because it is reflected in the first line and accurately introduces us to the subject matter of the poem.

*Beakerb* Best Parts: I love the metaphors of falling in love being like going for a swim in the pool. You played a lot with the image of that scenario and it worked really well. I especially liked the idea of heading to the shallow end and finding your footing. This is the perfect way to describe the attempt to end and leave a relationship behind.

*Beakero* Possible Suggestions: I would suggest working with the grammar a bit. You use commas well, but every line is capitalized, even if it isn't the beginning of a sentence. There is also no punctuation at the end of any lines. I think it helps the reader know when to pause, end a thought, and start a new one.

*Beakerv* Summary: Overall, I thought your poem was interesting to read and I feel like many people will be able to relate to the subject matter. The comparisons to swimming in a pool were spot on. There may be room for improvement with punctuation. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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