Review number # 6 of week Nov. 13-19, 2014

Hi Varla (very pretty name)

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: What My Mother Should Know

First Impression: The poem has a lot of potential with some tweaks.

What I liked: The exorcism I hope the author is finding in writing, I sense her pain immensely.

What needs your attention: If you took the first two lines and made it the first two lines in each stanza of four so each stanza was consistent it would emphasis the hopelessness the young woman felt. It would remind the reader with each detail that the mother mad the choice.

Favorite Parts: That the young woman escaped the situation, I am hoping she sought help for herself. It is very difficult to create a stable life with a traumatic childhood.

Overall Impression: I stand by what I said in the beginning it is has potential with some tweaks. If you do decide to come back to it, please let me know. I will gladly review it again.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .