4th review of the week


Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...because you entered my September contest

First impressions...I enjoyed your poem very much, you followed the prompt very well and you actually took it a step farther because my first thought was of grammar school. Great job!

Was the title interesting...yes, you get a sense of the piece without telling the whole story

Was the content rating appropriate...yes

Did you use a specific form of poetry...you wrote it in the same style as "The Raven"

Was there a rhyme scheme- what was it...each stanza had a rhyme scheme of abcbbb the first two had the same b and then the last used a different rhyme.

Did the rhymes seem forced...not at all every thing fit well together

Was there rhythm and flow...you use alliteration, rhyme, and meter wisely. This created a wonderful flow within your piece.

Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...none noted

Things I would change...I would not change a thing in this piece.

Favorite parts/lines...

Red dirt roads sprawled across the land like a varicose vein,

the imagery in this line is great!


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