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 | Autumn Concert  [E] Autumn merrymaking in the forest.  |
| General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful. Hello turtlemoon-dohi . Good day to you."This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review" I am reviewing your poem "Autumn Concert" for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"  ~Title:A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done. ~General/Form/Style:For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, and am partial to short rhyming poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write about the music of the autumn season, its beauty and richness of the woodlands that is heartfelt and whimsical. Good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much. ~Imagery:Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the rhythm, melody and movement seen in a forest, a palette of rich rainbow colors conducted by the autumn season that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. ~Flow/Rhythm:Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. ~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:Nice personification of trees, "songs sung" by them; of fall: composes "ballads"; of leaves, notes that "serenade"; of winds that "whistle" and of foliage dancing, a "ballet whirling, spiraling and spinning" - good descriptive/comparisons. ~Rhyme:Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccddee. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. ~Tone:Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty and elegance of the fall season as seen in the woodlands through a symphony of color and dance, an expression of the autumn winds and sunshine painting the leaves and foliage through nature's artistry that is amazing, filled with charm that gives delight to those who see its richness. One can sense the enchantment in its orchestration. Nicely done. ~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (whistle). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following line even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines: "Bronze, gold, and red notes serenade a harvest moon, While autumn winds whistle a woodland tune." I love these lines. I like the powerful imagery. It is a beautiful expression of the lyrical melodies orchestrated through a burst of color by nature that is vivid and vivacious. Nicely done. ~Overall:Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 11/26/2014 @ 1:10pm EST