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Hello, hopeinpoetry. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Snow1*

*Ornament2r* General Impressions: I like the title of this prose and the full stop in the title makes it seem more finite. I like one word titles and this piece preaches a good lesson.

*Ornament1g* Best Parts: My favorite part was when you listed the different things that could be going on with someone to make them behave a certain way. People do hide behind depression, shyness, anger, and other things. We should always give someone a chance and try not to judge them too harshly. I feel like a lot of judgemental people would actually fall into this same category though. When someone doesn't like others for being quiet or shy, it's usually because they're insecure about what the person may be thinking.

*Ornament3r* Possible Suggestions: I'm not sure if I understand the first sentence. Just because someone may act the way they do is because they are afraid of what everyone may think of them. The 'is' throws it off for me. Just because someone may act the way they do is because...? It doesn't seem to make sense. I would maybe expand on this sentence or reword it a bit. It will also make the introduction a better hook.

I didn't particularly enjoy the use of "Don't judge a book by its cover". We've all heard this line a ton of times and, in a piece this short, it's important to have strong, original points. I'm sure there are ways this can be stated in unique ways, possibly by drawing from personal experience.

*Ornament4g* Summary: Overall, I think this is an interesting sentiment and definitely a good lesson to learn. I do think there are some parts that could be expanded on or made more original. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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