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 Homework is Bliss  [E]
Satire on homework
by Sunny Mahesh
Review of Homework is Bliss  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, Sunny Mahesh . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Snow1*

*Ornament2r* General Impressions: A satire about homework? I knew I had to check this one out, and I wasn't disappointed. This is a humorous outlook on the physical and mental benefits of doing as much homework as physically possible with a smile on your face. *Bigsmile*

*Ornament1g* Best Parts: The first part that really made me laugh was, If you miss an assignment you might as well wear a sign saying, "I'm a worthless dinosaur." I couldn't stop laughing at the idea of someone walking around with a sign stating that around their neck. I'm sure people would be quite confused!

I also loved this part: Homework is superb for your health. It makes sure you don't sleep in. How true that is. *Laugh*

*Ornament3r* Possible Suggestions: There were a couple things I had suggestions about. Two of them have to do with this sentence: As an added bonus, it keeps your blood-pressure high, so you never need to worry about experience roller-coasters of anxiety because you're always anxious. There is a typo where experience should be experiencing, but more than that, the sentence itself took me a couple read throughs before I understood what you were saying. I might reword it as something like: As an added bonus, you'll never need to worry about experiencing rollercoasters of anxiety again. Your nerve-tweaking high blood pressure will keep you in a constant state of panic!

Regarding the 'not to offend any religion/belief' part, while it's a nice sentiment, it took me out of the satire a bit. We all know it's a humorous piece of writing, so I don't think it's necessary to add a reminder for people to not get offended. If someone's going to get offended, they will, with or without that addition.

*Ornament4g* Summary: Overall, I thought this was a funny bit of writing. It had my attention from beginning to end. I think there may be room for improvement with clarity in one part and another part may not be necessary. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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