Review number 2 # of week Dec. 4-10th

Hi Anina,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: I Wrote This While You Were Gone

First Impression: I like the thought of rewriting someone especially one that makes me bad.

What I liked: I headline your positives and ctrl x your negatives. That made me burst right out laughing, if only life could be that simple.

What needs your attention: In the last line, keeps should be keep other than that it rocks.

Favorite Parts: I've rewritten you to the point where you wouldn't recognize yourself anymore. Writers are lucky they can create characters in their minds that fulfill their fantasies, unfortunately those characteristics are very seldom found. Humans are intended to be flawed.

Overall Impression: I agree with your thought process that rewriting someone until the version that works for you would be awesome. I would rewrite my husband into a neat freak so the desk would not look like a hurricane hit it every time he uses it.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .