I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" . Thanks so much for entering! Some things I Like: You packed a whole lot of good character details in this piece, and the character's voice is pretty strong (if not super unique). Observations & Suggestions: The headers seemed a bit weird for a piece this short. Just my preference, I suppose. As interesting as the story is at times, I never really felt invested in it. I didn't really care what happened to the narrator and never lost myself in the story. I think it is pretty good for a contest like this one... it is a fair characterization. Somehow, it never quite gelled for me though. I can't quite explain it, to be honest. It had lots of great elements that added up to an 'okay' for me rather than a 'wow'. That's about all I can tell you... wish I could be more helpful here. As far as the contest goes, I do think that you fulfilled the prompt well! Good luck! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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