I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks so much for entering!

Some things I Like:

This is a really cute idea. Sorry if the word 'cute' doesn't seem to apply to the subject matter, but I adore horror... and this was decidedly cute to me. I think the bits from Skurzak were pretty entertaining and really added spice to the piece.

Observations & Suggestions:

It is interesting that you managed to have first person POV with two characters. As a result, neither of them is super strong, but both are alright. Skurzak has a much stronger voice, but I suppose he should. Anthony King was not particularly interesting, but as a whole, the piece works. I like the flow of words from one into the other character too. Amusing stuff.

This is a really unique sort of technique for a character contest. It was executed pretty well too, despite the low word count.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .