I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks so much for entering!

Some things I Like:

This was an interesting read. I like the general setup here... crazy dude being interrogated. That is the makings of a fun story.

Observations & Suggestions:

For the contest, the piece is supposed to be in the character's own voice. It was for half the story, but then it switched POVs and ended up using "Peter" rather than "I". That confused me quite a bit at first, to be honest.

In general, I don't think that the detective was the stronger character of the two either. The voice wasn't super unique for him, and there was so much focus on the criminal that is sort of negated Peter's importance.

I do like the story, but it could use an edit, particularly for that POV switch.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .