I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .
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Some things I Like:

This is what a well-crafted story looks like. The intro held a real hook. The casual mention of the clip was the first "Oh!" moment, when I realized what his father was approving of... though I had not even wondered why. I was immediately sucked into the story. When the trigger jerked, I was quite surprised at the result. I am rarely surprised.

Observations & Suggestions:

To be honest, the rest of the piece is good with quirky details and interesting character development, but it is difficult to top that intro. Excellent.

There are probably some nit-picky things that I could say about this, but I really really like it as it is right now. Great character piece... strong voice... very well organized and complete feeling. I dig it.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .