Introducing Falco [E] A brief description of the main character of my book in his own words (contest entry) |
I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" . Thanks so much for entering! Some things I Like: The letter is a creative way to go about this narrative. It works well. The writing itself is quite solid and eloquent, which seemed fitting too. Observations & Suggestions: I thought it was slightly odd that "The Ghost Hawk, though as no one technically knows who that is - that is to say, me" but the Ghost Hawk is legendary. It seemed... just a little strange to me I suppose. Equally odd in the beginning is the use of "stupid" immediately after words like "officious". That seemed a bit out of character tome. Toward the end, I was surprised at the mention of his horse and nature because they seemed off-topic. After rereading the reason for the letter, they do fit the purpose of 'describing a hero'. Perhaps they just seemed tacked on rather than flowing within the narrative? Anyway, a nice entry! Good luck! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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