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 Meanwhile, in Alabama  [13+]
A poem about Alabama.
by Jon Groste
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Jon Groste . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Snow1*

*Ornament2r* General Impressions: I love free verse poetry and I think it works so well for storytelling like in this one. It's also cool to see a poem like this that could easily be interchangeable with a short story on the same topic. I could see it working for either formatting and that's sort of unique.

*Ornament1g* Best Parts: My favorite part of this one was the overall story that was told and the style. It had a voice of its own and I really wanted to keep reading so I could find out what was going to happen with the man from Montgomery. The descriptions were vivid in imagery, especially when talking about the man's personality type told through what he was riding and his mannerisms.

Best overall lines?

Watched him preach the word of God into a man's chest
The bullet tearing through to his wife who stood begging for mercy

That first line is just wonderful, nothing more to say.

*Ornament3r* Possible Suggestions: The revolver that hang loosely in his hands,
Did the walking. I feel like 'hang' isn't the right tense in this line. I'm not sure if it should be hung or hanged, but it should definitely be past tense like the rest of the verbs in the poem.

*Ornament4g* Summary: This was an excellent piece of poetry and a joy to read. There were many lines that stood out to me and the story was interesting overall. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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